Wet Wood
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| I spent two summers here as a life guard and boat driver. I can still smell the aroma of the wooden boathouse 32 years later. Photo courtesy of Young Life Saranac Village Tupper Lake, NY |
lay beneath expanse of night
as summer sings her song
the rising of each
dancing breath
disappearing
above the earthy smell
of this wet wood
lay over me
Your midnight sky
glorious covering of stars
water lapping underneath
tucking in my soul
with heartbeats
of gentle waves
breathe deeply then
this lullaby
returned to You in praise
a sweet aroma rising
my closing eyes inhale
crystal memories born again
from this wet wood
Today, One Stop Poetry features lessons on writing free verse from Fireblossom.
p.s. Dear Shay, I do not presume to have learned or applied said lessons. The posted result above is only a reflection on the student, not the teacher. =). It’s hard to be an unlearned, unsophisticated poet…. but that’s a poem for another day.
p.s. Dear Shay, I do not presume to have learned or applied said lessons. The posted result above is only a reflection on the student, not the teacher. =). It’s hard to be an unlearned, unsophisticated poet…. but that’s a poem for another day.
Beautiful cadence to your poem Patricia - I think this is one of the important things with free verse to make it poetry versus prose - the descriptives but also the rhythm - leave out the rhyme but I think the rhythm is still needed - lovely :) Steve
ReplyDeleteah, smells evoke such thoughts in me..returning the praise, i like...smiles.
ReplyDeleteThis is a beautiful piece. Different... I can't put my finger on why. To think that wet wood could stir so many emotions.
ReplyDeleteAs Brian said, this is an evocative piece full of music and the reassurance one gets lying between the water and the moon. It's a song of summer, of joy, of youth, of remembrance, of the song of loons, and that special feeling the East Coast US gives you that is unique and personal. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteGay
They say scent is our strongest link to memories. Thanks for sharing yours.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful...the rhythm is lyrical. Lovely piece.
ReplyDeleteI think it's lovely. I especially like the heartbeat waves. :-)
ReplyDeleteI love this line "lay over me/Your midnight sky". This piece is beautiful and soothing, like a lullaby.
ReplyDeletetouching memories,it's always reviving, you lived your memories again with the words you poured with the post.
ReplyDeleteOh I love the flow of this!
ReplyDelete"lay over me
Your midnight sky
glorious covering of stars
water lapping underneath
tucking in my soul
with heartbeats
of gentle wave"
and I so love the peace in these lines.
i love how evokative smell can be, Wood smells are precious to me, they make me think of my carpenter daddy. :] lovely poem. xxxx
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