a city with no walls
But for pines
and evergreenswho made our beds
and called
come lay with me
and play with mesweep paths
adventure bound
as needles crunch beneath us
a secret world unknownsing and laugh and gallop
a picnic for the soul
while towering trees and evening breeze
enraptured every soul
laugh and love and languish
listen to the treesswaying heights of beauty
dancing just for me
so lay upon the needled bed
and stare upon the skypeaceful rows of grandeur
cloudless grace floats by
drink the sweet aroma
a cup of carefree days
scented by serenity
I pine for you, oh pines
Patricia Spreng
Gathering at d'Verse Poets tonight for the telling of a fairy tale. Come join us for the wonderful words of poets. The prompt reminded me of Tiny Town. A real place my sisters and I created in our childhood on top of a hill, in the woods behind our cabin. It was a fairy tale land alright...where no ghosts or goblins threatened us... it was safe. Now, isn't that a fairy tale? I tried to stay away from the rhythm and rhyme of this piece. But it took on a life of its own and became childlike in its skipping rhythm.
i like the rhythm..it underlines the carefree childhood mod..oh and how you make me wish for a needled bed with forest scent in my nose and nothing than blue sky above...wonderful...and that this place was real makes it double enchanting
ReplyDeleteah i pine for such a place as well...a place with no walls it speaks of no need for that, no division...there is a great peace within your words as well...i just wanted to sigh....
ReplyDeleteNice, Patricia. It's amazing how children are always building forts, houses, personal myths, constructing elaborate playscapes that exclude the adult world, but are a deeper world we forget I think too often as adults. I think the rhyme serves this piece well.
ReplyDeleteCool piece Patricia. Like the idea you presented here of tiny towns, great metaphor. Also I think you did a great job recreating that fairy tale sound and feel here. Great job. Thanks
ReplyDeleteLovely! I just really love rhyming verse - and this is lilting and perfect.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this look at your childhood sanctuary. It brought back halcyon days at summer camp. Also, I wanted to thank you again for your kind words and prayers for my mentee.
ReplyDeleteThis: delightful!
ReplyDeleteWonderful fairy tale feel, tiny town sounds like a nice place to be, even if built by thee.
ReplyDeletea great lesson for us all in our busy life-styles
ReplyDelete"a picnic for the soul." LOVE this friend. thank you for being such an encouragement to me. bless you.
ReplyDeleteThis reminds me of the area in my grandparent's woods where my brother and I would make little farms and roads. Your words are so picturesque.
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